tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post8504328255184309154..comments2024-03-08T05:29:29.773-05:00Comments on Daily Picspiration: Ruth Long Week 3: Heart & SoleUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-6318754087680963092012-07-18T20:27:33.663-04:002012-07-18T20:27:33.663-04:00Like Sarah, I'm late. Luckily, good words neve...Like Sarah, I'm late. Luckily, good words never get old. And I don't know what the first version of this looked like, but this version is touching. From the very beginning, you handled this with such a deft and delicate hand. I felt like the rhythm of this was like a ballet. The title is such a perfect fit. My favorite part was her insistence and his inability to resist it. And their disrobing as they spoke. <br /><br />I'm so glad you got past the total ick of losing work. It was worth it.J.M. Blackmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12452636020480500983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-7223357557851972712012-07-18T17:42:03.446-04:002012-07-18T17:42:03.446-04:00I'm late to the party, Ruth, but what a party!...I'm late to the party, Ruth, but what a party! This was exquisite. I loved the twists and turns and the emotions. Best of all, I felt like I was there. Awesome.<br /><br />Sorry to hear you lost the first version of this--I've come close to throwing up when I lose any written words. It's devastating! Just a little trick I do sometimes if I'm not at my main computer is to email myself the doc. That way if something goes off kilter, I at least have a backup.<br /><br />SarahSarah Aislinghttps://twitter.com/#!/SarahAislingnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-62703456579088819822012-07-18T14:12:37.538-04:002012-07-18T14:12:37.538-04:00Thank you! The photo of those feet channeled my in...Thank you! The photo of those feet channeled my inner dancer and the story seemed to write itself!! So happy you enjoyed it!! :)Bullishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05343416717330536392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-23486898491110873292012-07-18T13:53:10.470-04:002012-07-18T13:53:10.470-04:00Yeah, I can torture a character mercilessly but on...Yeah, I can torture a character mercilessly but only if I know I'm going to reward him at the end!! Darn soft heart!! :)Bullishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05343416717330536392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-80465427302857355282012-07-18T13:51:46.040-04:002012-07-18T13:51:46.040-04:00I know you and Kim probably chuckled that I chose ...I know you and Kim probably chuckled that I chose the feet over the beautiful face, but those darn toes spoke to me! Glad you enjoyed the read!!Bullishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05343416717330536392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-80964572485419411192012-07-16T17:38:48.201-04:002012-07-16T17:38:48.201-04:00Your words are pure magic. LOVELY. I love what y...Your words are pure magic. LOVELY. I love what you came up with for that prompt. Well done. I thought he was dying, I enjoyed the twist much better. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-89729901147916365812012-07-15T17:21:02.270-04:002012-07-15T17:21:02.270-04:00Yes, your twists worked perfectly to make us quest...Yes, your twists worked perfectly to make us question and learn more. Many of us have experienced the loss of a dream and our lost dream's importance to us is pivotal in your story! A story about loss, but also incorporating hope right at the end...Lisa Shambrookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12767127776898278402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-20556586175964834102012-07-15T14:10:27.481-04:002012-07-15T14:10:27.481-04:00How beautiful. His pain was so clear, and I too th...How beautiful. His pain was so clear, and I too thought that perhaps he was dying. However, when the story progressed and read that he is a dancer, or was a dancer, the truth is revealed.M L Gammellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10036863570650547228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-13382425498079886672012-07-15T14:08:54.745-04:002012-07-15T14:08:54.745-04:00Thank you, Bliss! And yes, twisting the two years ...Thank you, Bliss! And yes, twisting the two years throughout the story was intentional. Death is different for everyone (says the mortuary employee!!) and when I saw the photo of feet as my prompt, I knew what I was going to write. The death of a dream, of a career, of an entire way of life. But I gave him a bit of hope in the form of an angel in toe shoes! :)Bullishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05343416717330536392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-74516643633048301972012-07-15T13:50:16.172-04:002012-07-15T13:50:16.172-04:00I don't know if this was intentional but I sta...I don't know if this was intentional but I started out believing the guy was going to die...then finding out that the two years was about the company...and THEN finding out that there WAS a physical issue, at least for a ballet dancer that was limiting his time to do what he loves. That was just a brilliant set of subtle twists in a VERY short amount of words. Well done madam...well done.Miss Blisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08278662978242206276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-58620457535238758232012-07-15T13:49:42.334-04:002012-07-15T13:49:42.334-04:00Thank you so much, Jeff, for your kind comments an...Thank you so much, Jeff, for your kind comments and for all your support this week (and always)! <br /><br />Losing the original of this story when my travel drive crashed on Thursday was devastating. <br /><br />Two things saved me. <br /><br />1) Knowing that I had already decided to rewrite the story and change the POV. <br /><br />2) The support of my twitter writing community!!Bullishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05343416717330536392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1333414709315437964.post-49943751888285478582012-07-15T13:01:35.631-04:002012-07-15T13:01:35.631-04:00This is really good. I think your having to recre...This is really good. I think your having to recreate your story on the run gave it a certain frenetic quality that works with the nature of the action, with the idea of a clock winding down. And you tug the heart strings just the right amount.JTsuruokahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173187123835069767noreply@blogger.com